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Sunday, October 25, 2009

she had to come

She went her way, deciding wat was ryt/
He decided to wait till he died/
She had to come it took her sometime
.
one day she came back saw him bleedin n dying....
that was d day she realisd what true love means
d guy had to wait for her
.
god had to cry angels had to weep,
cus they were not together
.
like flowes blossom again
like sunligh shines after the dark
they had to bear some pain
but they were not destined to be apart
.
reincarnated once again they came together
n dey stayed together for d moment dat had to last forever...
.
:)

8 comments:

Naman Choudhary said...

that was real good .....umm..emotionally brilliant..and yes true love does live forever....congrats..!!!! great words..in a great frmae.!!

surbhit said...

hey thanx bro.... n yea m bak in indore, so see @ the cafe sumday... :)

shobhna said...

brilliant write up i must say....
it has the emotions n a point put up tht hw it feels whn ur true love gets back to u.....[:)]

keep up the gud work n lukin forward to more f such brilliant write ups...

Extremist said...

very well written and comes straight from the heart.
One thing, you write so good.So please change the lingo, do not use the chat shortcuts.

Rest it made clap at the glowing console.
Keep it coming.
love you!!

surbhit said...

@ shobhna,
it was great to have a comment from you...
surely it feels awesome when your true love gets back to you, provided it gets back :)
@ shruti sargam
every thing comes straight from the heart,
and il; try to avoid thios sms lingo
luv u 2 :)

vandy said...

so touching

Neeraj Agrahari said...

प्रिय मित्र सुर्भित,
मैंने काफी पहले आपकी यह कविता का पठन किया था परन्तु अवसर न मिल पाने की वजह से मैं कोई टिपण्णी नहीं कर पाया, आपकी सोच काफी भावनात्मक है अतएव मैं आज पुनः इस कविता का पाठ करने को विवश हुआ और यहाँ आया |

मैं आपके साथ रहा हूँ और आपके अन्दर एक शांत, निश्छल एवं अबोध बालक को पाया है, दूसरे के भावों को पढना एवं उन्हें स्वयं की क्रियात्मकता से उकेरना आपके चरित्र की एक और खूबी है | आपके लिए स्वयं द्वारा रचित कुछ पंक्तियाँ लिखना चाहूँगा ,

"हर भाव में तेरे इक आशा है ,
हर भाव में तेरी जिज्ञासा है ,
प्रिये, इन भावों को छोड़ न देना,
क्योंकि .. ये भाव ही तेरी परिभाषा है | "

आपका प्रशंशक,
"नीर"

surbhit said...

bhaiya, bahut achchi lines likhi hain... i luv u

 
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